Here’s a very short scary story, written for Susanna Leonard Hill’s 6th Annual Halloweensie Contest: a teensie-weensie 100 words suitable for a teensie-weensie person that uses the words ‘spider’, ‘moon’ and ‘ghost’. OK, so I’m aiming (again) towards the upper age limit of 12 and hopefully channelling a bit of a Neil Gaiman vibe (as much as I can for a hopeless amateur with a word count lower than Haribo ingredients labelling). A couple of years ago I entered this competition and was stunned when I came second (see ‘Halloween SMS‘). ย I doubt I’ll do as well this time because there are more entries every year and my previous piece was pretty unique. Anyway, here’s my effort which is bang on 100 words. Hope you enjoy it and have just a little shudder at the end…
โTrick or treat!โ shouted Toby as the old man opened his door.
Something crawling on the step caught Tobyโs eye. He raised his foot but the old man stopped him with a hand on his shoulder.
โIf you squash it, tonight when the moon is high… and youโre in your bed, the ghosts of all the squashed spiders will come to find you, with their broken legs and burst bellies, and wrap you in a phantom web.โ
A hairy spider crept into view on the manโs shoulder.
Toby ran so fast, he must have had eight legs.
Maybe… he did.
I think I’d run too. Love the “broken legs and burst bellies.” Yuck.
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Heh, weirdly, my last 2 pieces have described squished invertebrates. I think that killing dozens of flies in my office has had an impact on my subconscious!
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I can handle spiders better than flies. Spiders are quiet and mind their own business. Flies are annoying!
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Yep. Hence the mass murder on my office window sill…
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Much better than Haribo ingredients labelling… Good job with the word limit! ๐
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Thanks mate! I originally had about 10 words left to work with but couldn’t quite nail an ending. A bit of rejigging & it all seemed to pan out. ๐
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I’m tempted to do mine in a series of haiku… it really helps with the word count!
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That would be so cool! Not sure what the average 7 yr old would make of haiku but it’s definitely a novel approach.
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It’s not like I’m worrying about commercial concerns at this stage! ๐
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Ha! Mind you, you never know, you could be breaking a new genre: Haikidu.
That’s haiku with kid in the middle. Not a new Pokemon.
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I’d be running, too! And just think…if I had 8 legs, I’d be able to get away much faster. ๐ Great images!
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Thanks! I like to try and make the skin crawl a little! ๐
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Nothing like a scary old man to spook the shorts off of me!!
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A scary old man with a weird relationship with spiders. And possibly magic powers… ๐
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That warning would make me run too!
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Yep – even if you aren’t afraid of spiders, the old man’s words should chill your bones!
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I will not be squashing any siders today. Great story. Good luck and Happy Halloween!
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Thanks!
Spiders are lovely, really, reducing the number of nasty insects like flies. Just a pity they’re also very creepy!
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Oooh, spooky! I will endeavor not to squash any spiders tonight so I can avoid the ghosts of all those squashed spiders. Happy Halloween!
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A good plan!
Thanks for stopping by & Happy Halloween!
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So hard to write flash fiction but you did a great job with this one! This competition looks really interesting. Guess I’ll have to wait another 364 days to enter next time!
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Thanks mate! It is shocking how short 100 words really is & getting a punchy story done & dusted in that space is very challenging (which is why I took a novel approach a couple of years ago).
Even if I don’t get a finalist place it’s a great exercise.
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So spooky & I love the final thought that Toby might be one of them….oooh!
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Thanks! I wonder if Toby has realised yet…
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Ooh! And eww! Creepy and crawly! I’m not a spider squasher, but this story would sure make me think twice if I was! Fun to see a story for the older end of the range! Thanks so much for joining in the Halloweensie fun, Nick!
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Thanks Susanna, it was a fun challenge to get some kid friendly horror into 100 words! Glad you liked it ๐
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