Halloweensie Short Story: Old Man Spider

Here’s a very short scary story, written for Susanna Leonard Hill’s 6th Annual Halloweensie Contest: a teensie-weensie 100 words suitable for a teensie-weensie person that uses the words ‘spider’, ‘moon’ and ‘ghost’. OK, so I’m aiming (again) towards the upper age limit of 12 and hopefully channelling a bit of a Neil Gaiman vibe (as much as I can for a hopeless amateur with a word count lower than Haribo ingredients labelling). A couple of years ago I entered this competition and was stunned when I came second (see ‘Halloween SMS‘). ย I doubt I’ll do as well this time because there are more entries every year and my previous piece was pretty unique. Anyway, here’s my effort which is bang on 100 words. Hope you enjoy it and have just a little shudder at the end…

 

โ€œTrick or treat!โ€ shouted Toby as the old man opened his door.

Something crawling on the step caught Tobyโ€™s eye. He raised his foot but the old man stopped him with a hand on his shoulder.

โ€œIf you squash it, tonight when the moon is high… and youโ€™re in your bed, the ghosts of all the squashed spiders will come to find you, with their broken legs and burst bellies, and wrap you in a phantom web.โ€

A hairy spider crept into view on the manโ€™s shoulder.

Toby ran so fast, he must have had eight legs.

Maybe… he did.

 


 

27 thoughts on “Halloweensie Short Story: Old Man Spider

      1. Ha! Mind you, you never know, you could be breaking a new genre: Haikidu.
        That’s haiku with kid in the middle. Not a new Pokemon.

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    1. Thanks mate! It is shocking how short 100 words really is & getting a punchy story done & dusted in that space is very challenging (which is why I took a novel approach a couple of years ago).
      Even if I don’t get a finalist place it’s a great exercise.

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  1. Ooh! And eww! Creepy and crawly! I’m not a spider squasher, but this story would sure make me think twice if I was! Fun to see a story for the older end of the range! Thanks so much for joining in the Halloweensie fun, Nick!

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